> Our elbows graze and his windbreaker says “vwip,” “vwop,” the walk feeling almost like a jog until finally he slows, we’re getting ready to jaywalk
The little onomatopoeia feels quite forced and out of place here -- totally the wrong note. FWIW, AI really likes writing that kind of thing, and I wonder to what degree that's influencing actual writers.
> Our elbows graze and his windbreaker says “vwip,” “vwop,” the walk feeling almost like a jog until finally he slows, we’re getting ready to jaywalk
The little onomatopoeia feels quite forced and out of place here -- totally the wrong note. FWIW, AI really likes writing that kind of thing, and I wonder to what degree that's influencing actual writers.